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by **Choosejoy** » 03 Aug 2010, 14:12

I thought I'd start a thread for those poems that never got posted. Sometimes due to an overlap we might decide not to post it, or sometimes we write and just decide not to hit submit, or just can't find a place for it. Sometimes a line inspires us but it's two pages back. Sometimes we look back and wish we had changed a line or two. Feel free to post whatever you like here.

Here's one to start.

First line borrowed from knight:

Be the weaver always
eye on warp and weft
uniquely patterned
new cloth
collects behind us
lifts in the breeze
flying it's colors
we've no idea
of it's beauty
as we focus forward
eye on warp and weft

by **apple** » 03 Aug 2010, 14:21

I wish there was a way to retrieve all the poems in the mid morn I managed to spew forth in raw emotional plugging in.
Some how I always manage to accidentally lose them trying to post or delete them exercising the air in my head.
Thats how I lose mine in a posting frenzy. I never write anything down so its my own fault.
Then I sulk myself into a cup of tea and go to sleep.
Im so happy our Knight has joined the boys.
I wish Thorb would post more...
I miss his stuff...

Manny and Joro we love you too!

Hugs everyone!

by **Roxy127** » 03 Aug 2010, 16:52

I dont have a poetic bone in my body and couldn't come up with anything if my life depended on it !!

(That's all i have to say.........................)

by **Choosejoy** » 03 Aug 2010, 17:21

Roxy127 wrote:I dont have a poetic bone in my body and couldn't come up with anything if my life depended on it !!

(That's all i have to say.........................)

Bet you could, haiku is 5, 7, 5 syllables, and the first 5 are given to you. Personally, I count on my fingers, so what, ain't no poetry police, lol.

by **apple** » 03 Aug 2010, 19:33

No poetry police here~ these are the nice threads. Post away and have fun Rox~ give it a shot!

by **ambien girl** » 04 Aug 2010, 02:44

the essential substance of freedom
do as you will
but harm none
buried in hemoglobin DNA
it takes cowardice
to overcome it
it takes courage
to surrender
I mourn the little deaths
that I have caused
I cherish the little births
that I have caused
all factual and timepiece
there is relevance here

by **Roxy127** » 04 Aug 2010, 08:09

Aaw.........thanks,guys.......i might have a go at it tonight,after ive gotten in from work??

But,ya might ALL laugh at me :lol:

*scratchin' head,wondering how im going to become poetic......*
:mrgreen:

by **Choosejoy** » 04 Aug 2010, 10:31

Roxy127 wrote:Aaw.........thanks,guys.......i might have a go at it tonight,after ive gotten in from work??

But,ya might ALL laugh at me

*scratchin' head,wondering how im going to become poetic......*

How would you know we were laughing? We're verrrry far away, :lol:

But seriously, if you can count to seven you can't go wrong.

by **belinda** » 04 Aug 2010, 17:59

Choosejoy wrote:But seriously, if you can count to seven you can't go wrong.

Hmmm.

That's not ALL there is to writing haiku, you know!

http://www.wikihow.com/Write-a-Haiku-Poem

But there are tricks that can convince someone who believes they aren't poetic that they can manage a poetic thought. A poem is a way of taking a simple thing and making it relevant to all your readers - by sharing your thoughts about it.

Choose an object in your home that you find beautiful. A pet, a fruit, a piece of fabric, an ornament, a candle... a saucepan... and write in the present tense!

Thought one = what are you doing to what?

Thought two = What colour is it?

Thought three = what texture or feel does it have and how do you experience it?

Thought four = does it bring to mind a happy time or a sad time? What time is that?

Thought five = how do you feel about the object?

I look at the candle flame,
An orange flicker above the whiteness of the wax.
The warmth reaches me yet
Putting out a hand the wax remains cold.

I remember writing poems with children,
Comparing candles with ice.
The warmth of the flame matches
The warmth of the poems they gave me.

See? Not difficult, Roxy!

And that relates to a true experience - my poem for the children from that afternoon in a classroom was this:

Candle-flame,
Orange crinoline lady,
Searing in your beauty,
Shudder
And dance in the passing breeze.

Your inner darkness,
Your shield of warmth and light,
Waver before my eyes.
Heat shimmering,
Disturb your steady glow.

You rise now,
Tall, slim, detached,
Above the fire that breeds you,
The cold white ice of your home.
You leave the cloistered shell,
Gutter, and die.

(i never asked them to do that which i wasn't prepared to do myself!)

.

by **Choosejoy** » 04 Aug 2010, 23:01

What is Haiku?
A form that came to prominence in 17th century Japan, haiku
is NOT just a short poem. And it is NOT an axiom/ witty saying.

Structurally, it is brief, and in the
English language, typically follows the syllabic pattern:
5-7-5, although the use of *fewer* syllables is acceptable.
It is not a "western" form, which means that there is *no* rhyming,
no enjambment, extensive use of the present tense rather than the past,and an avoidance of direct metaphor/simile.

The language of haiku should be vivid, sharp, and non-redundant (it is only 17 syllables long, after all!). So avoid repetition.

Haiku frequently, but not always, contains a word or two that clue thereader in about the season in which the piece takes place--a "nature" word. It also contains a "break" often denoted by a dash, which is meant to call attention to juxtapositions, contradictions, or the importance of what follows.

Most importantly, is the purpose for writing haiku. It is to "capture"
the fleeting moment in place/time, the ineffable emotions produced by the transitoryexperience, the subtle connections one senses between nature and humanity,the indescribable contradictions of life. It is a meditative form ofwriting.

What is Senryu?

Structurally, senryu is identical to haiku. However, unlike haiku,
thematically, senryu does not concern itself with natural/ seasonal
phenomena, but rather, with human foibles and society. It is often
satiric, a very sharp (even biting) insight into the human condition.

What is Tanka:
Thematically, structurally similar to haiku, but with a longer 5-7-5-7-7
syllabic count.

This may help too, as much of what we write on the haiku thread would probably be classified as Senryu, if the above explanation taken from a poetry forum is correct. I have seen Senryu defined without the 5-7-5.

But we're no experts, on the current thread any 5-7-5 that starts with the previous last line will do.

Just having fun.

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